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David J. Sharp's avatar

Ah, the missed comma in that venerated law firm name: Potter, Stewart and Pornography.

Benjamin Dreyer's avatar

As Bea Lillie might add:

And Son!

David J. Sharp's avatar

And I would add, “And then some!”

William Bennett's avatar

In note 4, you have “that that” without a comma. I suppose it was in seventh grade that I was taught to use a comma in such a construction. Whenever I see such a comma it looks odd, and here I would have read the two that’s without thinking about it, except for Mrs Oquist’s instruction in seventh grade. May I take it that that lesson is now in the ash heap of history.

Benjamin Dreyer's avatar

There is a venerable custom of separating two consecutive uses of the same word with a comma (“What it is, is a violation of my rights”), but I’ve never really thought it necessary. I suppose there’s something to be said for not using the same word twice in immediate succession, but that’s a different conversation.

William Bennett's avatar

Thank you.

Sheila Fyfe's avatar

Oh, yes! That Haunting of Hill House comma is very scary. It calls attention to "walks alone." Brilliant and chilling.

Rick Davis's avatar

One of my Criticism Workshop teachers, probably Richard Gilman, would occasionally note that one of us had lingered too long at, or needed to stop by, the Comma Store. In that class we either read our own papers aloud for collective shaming or the instructor would do so, generally initiating the shaming. But it was a great way to learn to hear commas.

Benjamin Dreyer's avatar

“would occasionally note that one of us had lingered too long at, or needed to stop by, the Comma Store”

Very elegantly done.

Rick Davis's avatar

Whew!

Benjamin Dreyer's avatar

Extra credit for not skipping the "at," as a hasty writer might well do thus screwing up the tidy parallel construction.

Fran Manly's avatar

Okay, here's a question I've been meaning to ask for a while: Have you ever addressed the construction "but nor"? As in "neither this but nor that" where, to my ear, the "but" is redundant and annoying. I first encountered this in a British novel a few years back and figured it must be a British thing (though still annoying). But more recently it's showing up in American stuff too. I'd love to know what you think about it.

Benjamin Dreyer's avatar

Wherever it comes from, I loathe it. (I don’t know that I’ve ever seen it in the wild, but now I’ll probably be chased and haunted by it.)

Fran Manly's avatar

I predict you'll see it soon. I'm glad to know it's not just me.

Bob Gutowski's avatar

I now have a lovely mental image of SJ and BD working on that manuscript. Absolutely worth the price of admission!

Susan Kietzman's avatar

I love a comma that does a little something, in an invisible way, and I'm a frequent shopper at the Comma Store. I even put them in texts, which some say is ridiculous. I don't disagree, but I, nonetheless, persist.

Eric Johnson's avatar

Interesting that you published this when you did. I think it was Wednesday that I published my latest stack. The opening sentence was a comma explosion—something I’ve never attempted. When I read it I said, “Okay,” and “It somehow reminds me of BD.”

“I don’t know what it is, or why, but often, or always, it seems I attach significance to numbers seen in otherwise mundane instances in my day-to-day experiences.”

Benjamin Dreyer's avatar

Exquisitely done, and you’ve certainly punctuated it as I would have (if that doesn’t sound as if I’m flattering myself).

Eric Johnson's avatar

Whether you are or not, I’ll take it. 🙂