wordly peregrinations
[a copyediting test]
A friend forwarded this
to me—secretly, in dead of night—and by first, rough count it includes a solid half dozen or so copyediting infelicities, some arguable, I suppose, some certainly in-.
Comments are open to all.
Have at it.
(Y’know, the thing about copyediting is that, as copy editors well know whenever they cash their paychecks, it’s not all that expensive.)
(I suppose I’ll pop in later today and go over this point by point.)
(By point.)
Post-publication addendum: I did indeed pop in later today, and here’s where I popped.
Cover image: David Hockney, Portrait of an Artist (Pool with Two Figures), 1972
That "we" is too painful. Just stops me dead.
"When his worldly peregrinations finally brought him to Los Angeles, he forced us, longtime residents, to see our own city anew, transforming the everyday pools, palms, sprinklers, facades, and sky into that legendary light." I hope my wordly intervention helps we literary connoisseurs!